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(transitions) ние, «I». грамматика орфография оформление1,401,411,391,321,581,601,451,291,511,491,431,45808080808080808080808080,518,495,490,471,497,493,501,455,503,551,546,5491,39851,55851,32851,31851,42851,34851,29851,26851,35851,61851,44851,5285,537,523,468,464,520,477,458,441,481,490,499,5031,391651,481651,351651,321651,501651,471651,371651,271651,431651,551651,431651,48165,526,513,479,466,514,500,484,447,497,523,521,525195Приложение 10.

Статистические результаты письменного теста в зависимости от уровня владения английскимязыком (постэкспериментальный срез)Уровень владения английским языком(0=В1, 1=В1+, 2=В2, 3=В2+)В1СреднееNСтандартноеотклонениеВ1+СреднееNСтандартноеотклонениеВ2СреднееNСтандартноеотклонениеВ2+СреднееNСтандартноеотклонениеВсегоСреднееNСтандартноеотклонениеНаличиеобоснованной точки Наличие 3зрения источников(thesisдополнителstatement)ьнойкакпрофессионрешенияальнойпроблемной информацизадачии1,501,6766Тексторганизован наАвторскаямакроуровнпозиция,еточки(сформулирТекстГрамотнозренияЛогичноована цель,организова использова сформулиризложенны Использова правильнон наныованае идеинывыбранмикроуровн логические согласно(supporting контраргумжанр,Текстесвязки и традициямКорректноеargumentsенты,учтенаорганизова (правильная средства «Менеджмелексическоandучтены профессионн какструктура когезии внт»еsupporting альтернатив альнаяединоекаждоготексте(хеджирова Корректная Корректная оформлениdetails)ны мнения аудитория)целоеабзаца).

(transitions) ние, «I». грамматика орфографияе1,331,331,501,331,331,171,171,171,171,176666666666,548,516,516,516,548,516,516,408,408,753,753,7531,37301,47301,33301,30301,43301,53301,37301,30301,37301,50301,47301,4730,615,571,479,466,568,507,490,466,490,509,507,5071,381131,451131,311131,261131,471131,461131,371131,271131,431131,591131,441131,50113,506,500,464,439,501,501,485,444,498,511,516,5201,50161,69161,69161,75161,81161,44161,38161,31161,62161,50161,38161,5016,516,479,479,447,403,512,500,479,500,516,500,5161,391651,481651,351651,321651,501651,471651,371651,271651,431651,551651,431651,48165,526,513,479,466,514,500,484,447,497,523,521,525Приложение 11. Пример работы студента, постэкспериментальныйэтап (текст аналитического эссе и серия промежуточных черновиков)Черновик 1Claim: Corporations should look to the city of Helios when seeking newbusiness opportunities or a new location.Evidence: unemployment rate is lower; it provides more than it shares of theregion’s manufacturing job.Warrant: not mentionedBacking: not mentionedRebuttal: not mentionedQualifier: Helios is attempting to expand its economic base by attractingcompanies that focus on research and development of innovative technologies.My conclusion: the idea is not well discovered, here are given just some piecesof information which don’t make me believe in author’s words.Черновик 2I think that this piece of text cannot prove some information to the readers.

Itlooks just like some arguments that are not supported by any real facts or anystatisticdata.At first, I’ve mentioned that the author makes an accent on unemploymentwhich was lower than in the regional average. Here is no any statistics. Whichregions was this Helios compared with? Where are some numbers for provingthis argument? May be the population of this Helios is small, thereforeunemployment rate is low.Secondly, here are some words about historical moments about Helios. Again Ishould come back to such a words as “leak of information” especially when wetalk about history. For example me, as a reared who doesn’t know anythingabout Helios is not clear about which historical facts is author speaking about.So this information about history doesn’t convince me as a reader.Thirdly, an argument about attempting to attract that focus on research anddevelopment has no premises. This is just a supposal that has no a real base.Because it is not evident from the information that was given before.Черновик 3From my point of view this article cannot provide readers with some informativearguments.

It looks just like some persuasive arguments, which are notsupported by any premises, real facts or any statistic data. The author tries toconvince companies to place their business in the city of Helios. So, let usanalyze the article.Firstly, I have mentioned that the author makes an accent on unemployment,which was lower than in the regional average. Here is no any statistics data toprove this fact. Which regions was this Helios compared with? May be the197population of this Helios is small; therefore, unemployment rate is low.

Asusually, low rate of unemployment is a good indicator. However, from theeconomic point of view, a very low percent of unemployment is also bad forcorporations, which want just to start their business in this city of Helios. Itmeans that new companies will have to tempt employees from their competitorsby offering better conditions and salaries. This policy would lead to higherrecruiting costs, what is not profitable for corporations.Secondly, here are some words about historical moments of Helios. I can saythat this argument has leak of information. For example, for me, as for a rearedwho doesn’t know anything about Helios it is not clear about which historicalfacts is author speaking about.

Therefore, this information about history does notconvince me as a reader or legal entity.Thirdly, there are arguments about manufacturing jobs and attracting companiesthat focus on research and development has no premises. These facts can lead usto idea that the local future workers would not be suitable for all types ofcompanies, like art, finance, service etc.Finally, I can sum up all what was said.

The author does not provide us with allnecessary information, which could convince us. Here is no visible logicalstructure and the arguments are week. I think that this article can be improvedby adding more supporting information.Черновик 4 (final essay)The article provides us with some information about the city of Helios,trying to attract new companies start their business over there. However, thisarticle cannot provide readers with some informative arguments. It looks justlike some persuasive arguments, which are not supported by any premises, realfacts or any statistic data. So, I will analyze the article and prove my point ofview.Firstly, I have to mention that the author makes wrong accuracy aboutunemployment, which was lower than in the regional average.

Here is no anystatistics data to prove this fact. Which regions was Helios compared with? Maybe the population of Helios is small; therefore, unemployment rate is low. Asusually, low rate of unemployment is a good indicator. However, from theeconomic point of view, a very low percent of unemployment is also bad forcorporations, which want just to start their business in this city of Helios. Itmeans that new companies will have to tempt employees from their competitorsby offering better conditions and salaries. This policy would lead to higherrecruiting costs, what is not profitable for corporations.Secondly, here are some words about historical moments of Helios, whichare not convincible. I can say that this argument has leak of information. Forexample, for me, as for a reared, who does not know anything about Helios it isnot clear about which historical facts is author speaking about.

Therefore, thisinformation about history does not convince me as a reader or a legal entity.198Thirdly, there are arguments about manufacturing jobs and attractingcompanies that focus on research and development which create a failpromotion. These facts can lead us to idea that the local future workers wouldnot be suitable for all types of companies, like art, finance, service etc. Theseaspects are not good for business companies.Finally, I can sum up all what was said. The author does not provide uswith all necessary information, which could convince us. Here are rather weekarguments.

Therefore, it means that the city of Helios is not the best one foropening business.199Приложение12.Переченьсокращенийдиссертационной работеОП – образовательная программаПРкСП – письменная речь как социальная практикаиспользуемыхв200Библиография:1. Абрамова М. А. «Словарь для досужих» Жуана Фустера: традицияМишеля Монтеня в валенсийской эссеистике XX в. / М. А.

Абрамова //Испанские темы и формы: искусство, культура и общество : сборниктезисов докладов международной научной конференции, СПбГУ, 2013. —СПб., 2013. — С. 126–129.2. Азимов Э. Г. Словарь методических терминов (теория и практикапреподавания языков) / Э. Г. Азимов, А. Н. Щукин. — М. : Златоуст,1999. — 217 с.3. Аитов В. Ф. Взаимосвязанное обучение иноязычным видам речевойдеятельности на неязыковых факультетах в вузе на основе проблемногоподхода / В. Ф. Аитов, Р. И. Виноградова // Вестник Башкирскогоуниверситета. — 2006. — № 2. — С.

97–102.4. Аитов В. Ф. Проблемно-проектный подход к формированию иноязычнойпрофессиональной компетентности студентов (на примере неязыковыхфакультетов педагогических вузов) : автореф. дис. … д-ра пед. наук :13.00.02 / Аитов Валерий Факильевич. — СПб., 2006. — 25 с.5. Алексеева Л. Е. Методика обучения профессионально-ориентированномуязыку : курс лекций : методическое пособие / Л. Е. Алексеева. — СПб.